Another poet is yet to be discovered

This is the poem D&G gave me to be reviewed by the critics, and after reviewing it myself I rated her 3/5, and she said I did that because I was her friend. Now the results are here, and it turned out that I have given her the lowest rating although she deserved more.

The poem:

Recess
(Dedicated to my friend Rabab)

I watch the clock
it ticks and tocks
learning LEARNING
ignites my yearning
to go out and play
every which way

Paper airplanes fly here and there
I look at the the teacher, she does't care!
Tick Tock goes the clock

I stiffle a giggle, as she tucks in a squiggle
back into her chignon, and moves on
Quarter to two, I don't know about you
but I can't wait any longer
and it's not just about the hunger

She askes a question,
She calls on me,
the clock chimes TWO,
I run outside with glee!

Copyright Drunk&Gorgious, 2004

Reviews

Review:
this was very whimsical it moved me to childhood and the joys of then. Well as for the poetry itself it needs to be refined just a bit. There are a few errors that can be quickly fixed. Capitalizing learning in the first stanza took away from the gentleness of your poetry, 2nd stanza 2nd line there is a misspelled word "does't" and finally hunger at 1:45? Were you not fed at lunch? Or does the hunger mean learning? It was a nice poem, needs some tweaking but other than that I still rate it a 5. I do not take off for 3 or less typed errors heck we all make mistakes I do hope that this review is of great help to you and you will fix the problems that I have mentioned

Reviewed by
Christina V
(Expert Level)
Rated: 5/5

Review:
Tell your friend that she should keep writing! The poem is upbeat with vivid memories of waiting for the bell to move on.
This poem has a good flow.

Reviewed by
deeski
(Master Level)
Rated: 5/5

Review:
This is perfect for a first time piece. It was that sort of nursery rhyme kind of piece, but it was great. I would like to know how old your friend is, but tell her to keep writing

Reviewed by
JADAQUIN2000
(Expert Level)
Rated: 4/5

Review:
N i c e p o e m, w e l l w r i t t e n.
G o o d j o b, k e e p w r i t i n g.

Reviewed by
empire
(Master Level)
Rated : 4/5

Review:
This really is good for a first timer. She does appear to have talent and I am glad you're encouraging her. We all need that. Nicely written with good imagery.

Reviewed by
abby
(National Judge Advocate)
Rated : 5/5

Review:
I loved this poem. It has this playful and whimsical innocence to it. It made me smile and took me back to my own days of elementary school and the fun I use to have at recess. Encourage your friend to keep writing, she is very talented indeed.

Reviewed by
Nickles
(Talented Level)
Rated: 5/5

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D&G; do you still think that I have been biased to you because I'm your friend?
Let me tell you girl; YOU ARE TALENTED